Kia ora everybody.
this week my team the den (rooms 21 and 22) have been working on creative writing. by making one individual short story each day. this is one of the short stories I have made.
A Perfect Dessert
I lifted it up to my Face It was the most beautiful thing I had ever seen. But before I eat this wonderful site I want to remember this magnificent treat forever and ever. I looked at the exquisite display of fruit. From the finely chopped beautifully ripened rich strawberries to the tangy slice of green kiwi fruit. These fruits would taste great with the shard of love heart shaped waffle and the twisty twirly waffle stick. both sticking out of the drizzled berry sauce sprinkled with peanut sprinkles creamy french vanilla bean ice-cream. All this loaded onto the most biggest glass ice-cream cup I had ever seen. And don’t forget the beautiful yellow flower display and a thermometer striking out showing that this ice-cream was still super cold. And I should just stop blabbering on and eat it before it isn’t.
How do you like it, do you want to eat that ice-cream, and why do you say so. See you next time. Millie.
Talofa Lava Millie, dessert is my favourite meal (if you can called it a meal). I would eat it first if I was allowed, but I think it wouldn’t set a good example. Vanilla Bean is the best yoghurt, but I haven’t had it as an icecream. Fruit with icecream is always a good choice, makes it appear healthier. When describing nouns instead of most biggest how about humongus or huge and I am imagining the icecream slipping down my throat.
Tanya Mundy
Ako Hiko EPL
Hi Millie
This sounds like a fruity dream! It is a very interesting idea to have a thermometer in your desert. The only thing I would add to your perfect desert to make it me perfect desert would be chocolate sauce! Yum
Talofa Millie I like your post about a Perfect Dessert I also like how you describe the ice cream. Also to answer your question I would like to eat that dessert because it has one of my favourite fruits on it. Blog you later.
Hi there Millie! It’s Lyla here from the pod. I love your post, you had amazing describing words. The Ice cream sounded so good and now I want some!😂
How long did this take you to write?
Blog ya later, Lyla😉
Kia Ora, my name is Jemima and I am in the pod at Owairaka District School.
I really liked your blog post about your creative writting.
that ice cream looked so creamy and yummy. i love your descriptive words.
blog you later.